冗長な（redundant）表現：bandほか

早速ですが、redundantな他の具体例を挙げてみます。紫字はネイティブチェッカーのコメントです。

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I joined a music band at high school.

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I joined a music band at high school.

A “music band” sounds redundant. (Most bands are involved with music).

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You say you play the flute, but we don’t have a music band. We only have a guitar club.

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You say you play the flute, but we don’t have a music band. We only have a guitar club.

‘Music band’ -> ‘band’ as ‘music’ is redundant.

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They defended for the rest of the game and won the victory.

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They defended for the rest of the game and won the victory.

You could probably delete “the victory”. Seems redundant (a victory = win).

４．単語レベルではなくこんな表現レベルも。

This is one of the traditional Japanese clothes made in Japan.

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This is traditional Japanese clothing. –OR– This is traditional clothing made in Japan.

“Japanese ... made in Japan” sounds a little redundant.